Monday, May 6, 2013

hawk's shadow

the hawk's shadow
in and out
of the canyon's shadow

12 comments:

Lavana said...

Like us in the life's canyon....

Warren said...

Isn't that the truth, Lavana - in and out of the shadows. Thanks for commenting.

Warren

Adelaide said...

A lovely visual with more than one layer of meaning.

Adelaide

Warren said...

Thanks Adelaide - This one went through so much workshopping in AHAPoetry, so many suggestions for changes, that I finally went back to my original and stuck with it. Thank you for connecting with it.

Warren

Bill said...

day in the sun
my shadow somewhere
in the shadow

Warren said...

That's a fantastic haiku, Bill - I am totally jealous. This is why I consider you a mentor, a standard for me. Thanks.

Warren

Magyar said...

Always... _m

Gillena Cox said...

like the layering in this one

much love...

polona said...

a good shadow haiku, which yours is, is alkways a pleasure to read...

Warren said...

Thanks, Doug - I always appreciate your comments.

Hi Gillena - Thanks very much for coming in on this one and for your comments.

Hi Polona - As always, your comments are insightful and welcomed.

Warren

Adelaide said...

About workshopping...sometimes it's better to go with your initial instinct. Often the suggestions, although they may be good ones, result in an entirely different poem, not what you intend, but what someone else intends. Glad you stuck with your original.

Adelaide

Warren said...

Hi Adelaide - You are right about suggestions often pulling a person away from their original intent, and toward someone else's idea of what it should be. Thanks!

Warren