A rich and evocative moment.
Thanks, Bill - This is one of my first haiku and I coupled it with an image I created in CorelDraw (an amateurish one at that). The haiku needs work and the image does too . . . it was something to pull up and put on the blog.Warren
Both work very well, I think.Adelaide
You just think - I hope you are right that this oen works, but this is a very early haiga, image and all, so it may not be all that great.Thanks - Warren
Perhaps, I should have been more definite: Both work very well. Line 2 of the haiku is a pivot line, which gives the poem two readings and intentions. The stylized, precise image is in contrast to the mental image of fog, which is loose and shapeless.Adelaide
Hi Adelaide - I was just kidding, with myself primarily - this is an early attempt at haiga and I've thought about changing it up. There is some shifting, changing that can improve it. Forgive me if I came across as defensive, which I didn't intend at all - I think my question was a question I was aiming at myself.Your friend,Warren
just dropping by to say hi :-)i found you through Bill and i see you have my blog in the links (thank you).i'm quite fond of your haiga and for all that i've read about loons and their calls i hope some day to hear it in nature...
Thanks, Polona - Yes, I was surfing haiku and found your site - you are an outstanding haiku poet! You have a mastery of the techniques and I have enjoyed reading your poems. I'll go back in and comment.Thanks - Warren
Just lovely !
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