Thursday, July 7, 2011

regretting nothing

warmth of a summer regretting nothing

I don't often try one-line haiku

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our old house . . .
the sad turn from love
to memories

Something from the past

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12 comments:

Susannah said...

Beautiful. :-)

Gillena Cox said...

two nice ones, in the 3 line enjoyed the turn resonated in the phrase

much love...

Warren said...

Thanks Susannah and Gillena - I very much appreciate your reading and commenting! I'm glad you like them.

Warren

Kristin Riggs said...

So beautiful! Both of these are terrific, but the one-line really struck me. Makes me think of a summer romance from my teenage years.

your kiss tells me
we only have tonight-
summer twilight

Sincerely,
Kristin

Warren said...

What a gorgeous haiku, Kristin - Thank you for sharing it and thanks for stopping by!

Warren

sandy said...

I came here by way of Kristin.
Your poems comliment each other.

Adelaide said...

Your one liner works for me.

Adelaide

Warren said...

Thanks Sandy - I'm glad you stopped by. Come back often (which means I had better get off my duff and write).

Thanks Adelaide - I'm just never certain how a one-lier is supposed to work. But I'll accept you comment and be glad I got it.

Warren

Danièle said...

Your one-line-haïku tells so much through its silences.

Warren said...

Thank you Daniele - I appreciate your reading and your thoughts on the one-liner, which I was very uncertain about.

Warren

Adelaide said...

I always think a one-liner works best if it can be read in one breath all the way through without pausing and still make sense, and also can be broken into phrases as yours can.

warmth of a summer regretting nothing
warmth of a summer
a summer regretting nothing
regretting nothing
warmth of a summer regretting

Each phrase can be read separately and make sense, as well as sound poetic.

Others will have different approaches to one-liners, but I try this with mine. (I'm not always successful)

Adelaide

Warren said...

A good lesson for me in one-liners! Thank you, my friend.

Warren