Monday, June 21, 2010

a few haiku

ancient pine
the sun climbs
limb by limb

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daybreak
a canyon wren singing
just above silence

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dead crow
the sheen of the sky
on its wings

8 comments:

Bill said...

All very food, Warren. If I had to pick a favorite, it might be "ancient pine" for its fusion of the ancient and the present, but I could make a case for any one of them.

Warren said...

Thanks Bill - I tend toward the dead crow haiku, but then, crow haiku are among my favorites.

Warren

Adelaide said...

I like the pine haiku the best of these. Recently I wrote this:

sunset
limb by limb the pine
in shadow

Adelaide

Warren said...

Hi Adelaide - I had this one workshopped through AHA a year or two ago - I just didn't want you to think I copied it (and I know you didn't copy mine) - nothing new under the sun, as they say. Warren

Adelaide said...

You saw your pine at sunrise; I saw mine at sunset. They make a good pair.

I could revise mine to two lines so as to cap yours for a tan renga:

ancient pine
the sun climbs it
limb by limb wg

at the end of the day
limb by limb in shadow abs

Adelaide



Adelaide

Warren said...

Tan renga - I've seen the term and seen the poems, but know absolutely nothing about them. I need to read about them. I'm not even sure how they are formed, etc. Thanks, Adelaide.

Gillena Cox said...

Nice set; i would leave out the word 'it' in Line2 of ku#1

much love
gillena

Warren said...

That's funny, Gillena - I added the "it" just before posting to the blog. Shoulda known the original version was better. Thanks kiddo.

Warren